You are the story. If a detail is forced into your essay because you are attempting to manipulate your reader into being impressed instead of revealing who you are, you will reveal yourself as a fraud.
You Can't Hide Yourself From An Informed, Critical Reader; You Can Only Refuse To Cooperate In An Honest Exchange
When you write a personal statement for your application, the great question the reader wants answered is, "Who is this person and what will they contribute to our incoming class?"
Remember, your curriculum vitae/resume will cover your experience timeline, but it will not reveal how you think. That is the great opportunity (and challenge) that lies in the personal essay: the way you reveal yourself to your audience. You can't avoid revealing yourself in your writing. You can only show yourself, or attempt to hide yourself behind a veil of manipulation. No other option exists.
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